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Mama,
your baby girl's swimming
in dead of the night
hair, scarred knees,
overgrown weeds, and
countless pairs
of shoes-
with those
orange and yellow wheels
that hug my toes
and heels

I'm running into
parked cars
trying to get
my kite to fly
and hiding under
dashboards
listening to you
fight

I'm rummaging through
boxes of secrets
that Daddy tried
to hide-
solving puzzles with pieces
I'll never uncover
in these thoughts
of you

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thoughts of swimming in hair
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:iconsammur-amat:
=Sammur-amat Feb 26, 2013   General Artist
Congratulations on the DLD! :iconlainloveplz:
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:iconhfeather53:
*Hfeather53 Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you dollface!
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:iconsammur-amat:
=Sammur-amat Mar 6, 2013   General Artist
You're always welcome, you wonderful wonderful soul! :huggle: <3 <3 <3
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:iconjacoooify:
~Jacoooify Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sublime ^_^
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:iconhfeather53:
*Hfeather53 Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you (=
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:iconbloodawni:
*bloodawni Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, so lovely. Congratulations on your DLD for this one. :)
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:iconhfeather53:
*Hfeather53 Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you (=
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:iconbloodawni:
*bloodawni Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome. :)
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:iconnostrovia-poetry:
~nostrovia-poetry Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful poem. Thank you for sharing! It has a nice "river" flow to it.
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:iconhfeather53:
*Hfeather53 Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much!
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