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tonight-
even she is jealous
of our passion
ripping apart the
earth with her
violent tears
attempting to thieve
our warmth with her
chills

she hollows old bones
like a drill
with a surgeon's
precision

tarry the night
tarry the day
our wake
is beyond the
storm
~and they will envy us all the more when we walk hand in hand through the wreckage of these storms
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XXFallbackXX Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012
haters gonna hate right?
Haha but seriously, this tells a story even though it's so short and settle. Great job once again :heart:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed
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Will7744 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Professional Writer
like your tag line and this poem - normally I'd balk at the image of tears violently ripping the earth or the use of the word "tarry" at all, but somehow you manage to pull it off - second stanza is a cut stone - that's some voodoo you do
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I'm told i have a tendency to use cliche phrases... But when that's the best way i know to describe rain falling from the sky, freezing, and plowing into the ground... It was just that- violent.

Thanks so much for the feedback.
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Naiah57 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely love the images I get when reading this
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much!
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CephiraForest Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
I love the sharp imagery of this :)
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you =]
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