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the only summers ever known
locked inside my heart
frost bites at extremities
chilled air invades my chest
as i inhale;
the sharp sting crippling
and i pull my arms into my breast
fighting to keep you there

i memorize and recite
every line
every rhyme
stirring melodies your words danced
into the grooves of my brain-
it's my only escape;
whoever said hell is alight
was sadly mistaken-
i know the deep is really white
and it's trying to suffocate me

cinch up my dress;
put a little color
in this- forever
winter, wonder lost
and thieving
your breath,
land
written for :iconpoeticalcondition:'s contest "A Winter Only World". (contest found here [link] )

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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
lovely final stanza.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like the word cinch ;3
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
tis a good word :nod:
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Gripping, sad, and beautiful.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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callerofcrows Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:glomp:
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InklingsOfOblivion Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love the themes in this, the longing and sadness beautifully portrayed through the coldness of winter. Excellent.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!
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InklingsOfOblivion Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome :heart:
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enigmaticsmile Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Fucking gripping. Awesome, awesome title! This gets a fave!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D
Faves from you are the best!
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Pencil-Wolf Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student General Artist
Mmm the second stanza is beautiful. <3
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! It's my favorite also.
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Pencil-Wolf Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Welcome. (:
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful and aching. Nice work. Good luck in the contest!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much (=
An all winter world would totally be hell on my body. Arthritis and poor joints don't fare well in the cold.
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Mmm.. Yea, I see what you mean. I just think it would be miserable. Spring is my favorite!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love fall. (=
It's nice and cool and everything changes colors. Bright orange and brilliant reds... as if the world is set on fire and winter's about to put it out.
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, yes! Fall is lovely too.
=P You sound just like my poem - [link]
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
<3 gorgeous poem
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Thought you might like that. =) :heart:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I loved it!
I wish my imagery was better. I feel like I give a better description of emotions than I do surroundings.
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