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you weigh something like gravity
in my tired expanse. you are
sand;
(my once splendid mountain)

my love is the ocean
that has worn you down.
with my monstrous tongue,
i pulled you in.

as you fall,
sweeping peacefully into the depths
and filling each crevice,
i am learning to inhale shores.

some would say i'm suffocating
and bring me buckets of air (only to have it
escape my slippery grip).

no, the tides need something heavy
to make of her
a home.
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As the suggester says, ocean lungs by *Hfeather53 is a new, breath-taking spin on ocean imagery that leaves you wanting more. ( Suggested by RiseandBe and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2013  Professional Writer
:clap:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013   Writer
That first stanza could stand on its own and still be wonderful, nice work
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! What a wonderful compliment (=
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swansisters Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful,and congrats 
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, dear!
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WingDiamond Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
:iconbeavisplz::iconsaysplz: Sitting on a park bench ... Eyeing little girls with bad intent!

:iconbutt-headplz::iconsaysplz: Hey Aqua-lung!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wut
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:iconwingdiamond:
WingDiamond Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013
Sorry ... That was a Jethro Tull reset.  www.youtube.com/watch?v=v43LNB…

Nice poem!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
OH... it's ok... lol. I knew it was more than likely in reference to something... I just wasn't sure what! Thanks for sharing the song (=
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ghearradh Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
congrats of the very well-deserved DD. :heart:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Julianne227 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Simply great!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
congrats on the DD! :happybounce:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:squee:
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crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013
Congrats on the DD! :heart:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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LostGryphin Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Nicely written - congrats on the DD
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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aprilwednesday Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013   Writer
really truly beautiful, the last stanza especially. congrats on the DD! :heart:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment :heart:
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sciencevsart Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
'I am learning to inhale shores.'

Chills. Flawless, flawless imagery.

Loving this already. If the ocean is your lung, what of the heart?
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much. I'm glad you were able to connect with it :heart:
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Agatochi Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wonderful work~
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you (=
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure :happybounce:
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The first and last stanzas --> :heart:
This is really nice work.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you <3
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure!
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brain-tree Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013   General Artist
"i am learning to inhale shores."

That's a wonderful line.

I really like the gentle tone of sadness in this, it feels very natural.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I suppose it is a gentle sort of sadness that swallows you when you feel like you ruin the people you love :hug:
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Perfling Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Student General Artist
"with my monstrous tongue,
i pulled you in."

That's cool!

The whole thing is cool :)
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :iconfattestlaplz:
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