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you weigh something like gravity
in my tired expanse. you are
sand;
(my once splendid mountain)

my love is the ocean
that has worn you down.
with my monstrous tongue,
i pulled you in.

as you fall,
sweeping peacefully into the depths
and filling each crevice,
i am learning to inhale shores.

some would say i'm suffocating
and bring me buckets of air (only to have it
escape my slippery grip).

no, the tides need something heavy
to make of her
a home.
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As the suggester says, ocean lungs by *Hfeather53 is a new, breath-taking spin on ocean imagery that leaves you wanting more. ( Suggested by RiseandBe and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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lombregrise Sep 27, 2013  Professional Writer
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Hfeather53 Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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:iconfallingasleeptonight:
That first stanza could stand on its own and still be wonderful, nice work
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Hfeather53 Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much! What a wonderful compliment (=
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swansisters Sep 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful,and congrats 
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Hfeather53 Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, dear!
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:iconwingdiamond:
:iconbeavisplz::iconsaysplz: Sitting on a park bench ... Eyeing little girls with bad intent!

:iconbutt-headplz::iconsaysplz: Hey Aqua-lung!
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Hfeather53 Sep 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wut
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:iconwingdiamond:
Sorry ... That was a Jethro Tull reset.  www.youtube.com/watch?v=v43LNB…

Nice poem!
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