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Lit. Daily Pick by DorianHarper

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i am beside myself
and you are inside me -
water boarding my heart
and seeping into my lungs.

exit, please, with haste
before i'm laid to waste.

i'm already nothing at all,
aren't i?
aren't we?

a melody comes choking out of my
salt ridden throat
invoking fear in each ear
it falls deafly on.
they never remember me,
until i'm gone,
and neither will you.

chew,
baby chew,
on these verses, these words,
these curses -
they vex me
and i have foretold them all.

perhaps, i am a fatalist
after all.
read it out loud... it's better that way, i swear

also, any feedback would be lovely :iconfattestlaplz: i need to come back and edit this later... (this is just word vomit... where is the word vomit category?)
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Jacoooify Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely bit of wordplay in those first two lines :) If this is vomit, then gosh.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :tighthug:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh, it does sound good read aloud :nod:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
yeah... i still don't like it T_T
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:/ why not?
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:iconhfeather53:
Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i don't know... does it make sense?
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah, makes sense to me.
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:iconhfeather53:
Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
well that's good to hear ;o
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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