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I'm sorry, Alice, the looking glass lies.
Flowers don't sing
and hares don't keep time.
Your world of wonder
is all make believe -
Why else would your reflection
giggle and wink?

You aren't a child any longer, my dear.
Have a matchstick for your dreams
and a hammer for that mirror.
Our hands may be calloused
as we coddle our pasts
but delusions are enemies
and wistful muses pass.

I will wait for you, darling,
I will write for you, lass.
I will capture life's beauty
and contain it in glass.
Though, the singing that lingers
is the voice of my own.
The fragrant flowers are dying
even while their seed is sown.
edit - good lord guys, i'm glad you all enjoy this so much. thank you for all the faves and comments, i really don't deserve it.
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Adonael Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What can we say?? We're suckers for Through the Looking Glass themes :P

Bravo...brilliant poem. I like how you characterised the reflection.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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Adonael Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No worries! -bows-
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travelgirlxx Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
Love!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(=
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RachelStrzelecki Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
There's a nice rhythm in this - I like the rhyming too. The last stanza is my favourite. Might give you a critique on this when I have the time :)
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! (=
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LightningIdle Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
WELL. Just gonna go cry in the corner now.
This was really well-written, and it does a beautiful job of reflecting how debilitating the real world is. Amazing.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
>.< thank you. I'm glad my message got through.
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LittleMissChess Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student General Artist
I love the rhyme scheme of this poem and the overall message. This being Alice-themed only makes me love it more. Beautiful work! <3
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it (=
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somebodi-else Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
beautiful, as usual. But being Alice themed makes it all the more amazing
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
(= thank you :hug:
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somebodi-else Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :D
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Tayler817 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is beautiful :)
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, I'm glad you think so!
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FoolsGolde Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student General Artist
heartbreaking but truthful!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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4TheQueenOfDiamonds Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Straight to the favorite box this goes :)
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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silenced-echo Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Absolutely wonderful writing :) I love the rhyming rhythm and the imagery :)
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much!
i'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013   Writer
I am a complete sucker for anything to do with Alice or Peter, Neverland or Wonderland.

Despite my usual avoidance of rhyme, my favourite section of this was actually the final stanza - absolutely beautiful.

Very well done indeed, m'dear! :iconslipperyhugplz:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. I wasn't intending to go with rhymes but it's what came out D8
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Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013   Writer

You are most welcome.

Sometimes it happens :P
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
great rhythm in this.
beautifully conveyed emotion too.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you (=
i was nervous about the rhyming but that's how it came out so i went with it D8
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D glad you did!
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
you're lovely :tighthug:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
no-u <3
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
many congrats on the well-deserved poem love! :heart:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hey, very nice twist on the Alice theme. I like this.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!!!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
Very nice...I think a lot of people will really relate to and feel this one.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! it was difficult to write.
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crossing-ariel Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013
It'll only get easier.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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