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I'm sorry, Alice, the looking glass lies.
Flowers don't sing
and hares don't keep time.
Your world of wonder
is all make believe -
Why else would your reflection
giggle and wink?

You aren't a child any longer, my dear.
Have a matchstick for your dreams
and a hammer for that mirror.
Our hands may be calloused
as we coddle our pasts
but delusions are enemies
and wistful muses pass.

I will wait for you, darling,
I will write for you, lass.
I will capture life's beauty
and contain it in glass.
Though, the singing that lingers
is the voice of my own.
The fragrant flowers are dying
even while their seed is sown.
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edit - good lord guys, i'm glad you all enjoy this so much. thank you for all the faves and comments, i really don't deserve it.
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~Adonael Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
What can we say?? We're suckers for Through the Looking Glass themes :P

Bravo...brilliant poem. I like how you characterised the reflection.
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*Hfeather53 Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much!
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~Adonael Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No worries! -bows-
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*Hfeather53 Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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~RachelStrzelecki Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
There's a nice rhythm in this - I like the rhyming too. The last stanza is my favourite. Might give you a critique on this when I have the time :)
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*Hfeather53 Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! (=
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Mood: Love *LightningIdle Jan 23, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
WELL. Just gonna go cry in the corner now.
This was really well-written, and it does a beautiful job of reflecting how debilitating the real world is. Amazing.
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*Hfeather53 Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
>.< thank you. I'm glad my message got through.
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~LittleMissChess Jan 23, 2013  Student General Artist
I love the rhyme scheme of this poem and the overall message. This being Alice-themed only makes me love it more. Beautiful work! <3
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