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    the mothballs in my stomach swallowed all your butterflies. a cocoon of death lies within me; i rubbed against your dust-ridden wings and sang a song of suicide to you. sleep now, child,
    close your eyes and take flight
    from this frightful edge of life
    and i will guide you through.
    filling your bones with ache, i will turn your jagged fingers into plows and you will sow my seed - kiss the things you love, sweet dear, and harvest all these years alone. the rocks in your heart will know when your deeds are done.
hear me read it here: [link]
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Student General Artist
Where did the link go? (This is beautiful though.)
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I'll see if I still have the link, it's because I changed names on tumblr.
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Student General Artist
Ah okay. Makes sense. 
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Meggie272 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this. I love how each stanza has a different emotion to it, but they're all imbued with a quiet weary sadness - just lovely.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013   General Artist
movingly macabre and magnificent piece of poetry you have here, sweetheart! :love:
fantastic job! :clap:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you, darlin'
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013   General Artist
sure thing, splendid lady :heart:
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Bark Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Professional Writer
Yes.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's so sad though D:
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ncgirl Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Love this, very compelling!
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
dark, weighty.
I love the final stanza.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
it's too dark. it's horrible.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
sometimes we need to write about the black, inky things.
I think you wrote about them very well.
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Perfling Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student General Artist
absolutely love the first two lines :)
the mothballs in my stomach
swallowed all your butterflies.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013   Writer
I think this line - a cocoon of death lies in me - needs to read: a cocoon of death lies within me. It just seems a little jerky the way it is now.

I like the concept, actually. Wish I had thought of it.
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i should say... that's like... the best compliment ever, by the way... because i adore your writing so, so much :iconletmehugyouplz:
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Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013   Writer
Nonsense! You've gone batty with the rest of my watchers! :giggle:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
nonsense yourself :heart:
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Hfeather53 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh, thank you much! that is a good suggestion :la:
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Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013   Writer
No problem! :squee:
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